I have incorporated several notes I got from two discerning readers in the rewriting of the 3,000 word abstract of my long manuscript about the life and times of my father. Each note contained a bit of painful truth, and mingled with my own dissatisfaction with the shorter piece. Kept me up last night, forcing me out of bed to write the first few paragraphs which now begin the rewrite.
Here is the near 4,000 word version, which I believe is somewhat improved.
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